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Academic Writing Practice Test 1

Academic Writing Practice Test 1 Task 1

Task 1

This report will describe a bar chart that shows the estimated world illiteracy rates by

gender and region for the year 2000.

Figures for male illiteracy are shown in six areas.

Figures for male illiteracy are shown in six areas. The lowest rates were in DevelopedThe lowest rates were in Developed

Countries, Latin America/Caribbean and East Asia/Oceania with rates of 1% (a

Countries, Latin America/Caribbean and East Asia/Oceania with rates of 1% (approximately),pproximately),

10% and 8% (approximately) respectively. The rates for the

10% and 8% (approximately) respectively. The rates for the next three areas were muchnext three areas were much

higher and quite similar to each other. Sub-Saharan

higher and quite similar to each other. Sub-Saharan Africa, the Arab States and South AsiaAfrica, the Arab States and South Asia

had rates of approximately 31%, 29% and

had rates of approximately 31%, 29% and 34%.34%.

Female illiteracy was much higher relatively in each area except Latin

Female illiteracy was much higher relatively in each area except Latin America/CaribbeanAmerica/Caribbean

where it was only slightly higher. The

where it was only slightly higher. The lowest rates for female illiteracy were again Developedlowest rates for female illiteracy were again Developed

Countries, Latin America/Caribbean and East Asia/Oceania with rates of approximately 2%,

12% and 20%. Again the rates

12% and 20%. Again the rates for the next three areas were much higher and quite similar tofor the next three areas were much higher and quite similar to

each other. Sub-Saharan Africa, the Arab States and South

each other. Sub-Saharan Africa, the Arab States and South Asia had rates of approximatelyAsia had rates of approximately

48%, 52% and 56%.

In conclusion, there is a worrying trend that female illiteracy rates are

In conclusion, there is a worrying trend that female illiteracy rates are always greater thanalways greater than

male ones, although the male/female gures for Latin

male ones, although the male/female gures for Latin American/Caribbean countries areAmerican/Caribbean countries are

similar. In general, richer and developed countries have better gures, although the Arab

States, some of which are very rich, have poor gures.

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Task 2

What young people should study

What young people should study at school has long been the subject of intense at school has long been the subject of intense debate anddebate and

this is a question that certainly does n

this is a question that certainly does not have one correct answer.ot have one correct answer.

Young people need to be given the best possible chance

Young people need to be given the best possible chance of doing well at school. In of doing well at school. In traditionaltraditional

curricula, there is a wide variety of subjects with a mix of

curricula, there is a wide variety of subjects with a mix of academic and non-academicacademic and non-academic

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subjects. In this way a young person is formed with a rounded education. Non-academic subjects would include sports, cooking, woodwork and metalwork. Many people would believe this is the best form of education. A young person should learn things other than academic subjects. Sport is particularly important. Young people have to learn to love sport, so that they can be t and healthy later in life. If not, an obese and unt generation will grow up in today’s society.

The point of view that education is so important that students must be pushed as hard as possible to achieve their best is perfectly valid. It sounds a good idea to only expose the students to academic subjects, as then they can spend all of their school hours on studying areas that will get them into university and good jobs later in life. However, many people also acknowledge that a more rounded education would produce a better individual. It is important to remember too that a lot of people, maybe even most people, are not academically minded and would benet from a more vocationally based education. Forcing academic studies onto them would lead to failure and the student leaving school too early.

In conclusion, it is clear that whereas a wholly academic curriculum would suit and benet some young people, non-academic subjects are still important inclusions for most students in today’s syllabi.

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Task 1

The chart shows how unemployed men and women from the UK spent their time in 1982. In the morning, 19% of men do housework as opposed to 49% of women. In the afternoon, this number is only 7% and 21% for men and women respectively. 20% of men and 26% of women shop in the morning, but only 9% of men and 17% of women shop in the afternoon. For job hunting, 22% of men and 16% of women do it in the morning and 12% of men and 13% of women in the afternoon. 6% of men and 10% of women visit friends or relatives in the morning and 12% of men and 17% of women do this activity in the afternoon.

The four activities described above are the most popular. There are others, however, with smaller percentages: gardening, watching TV, reading, decorating, walking, doing nothing or sitting around, staying in bed, visiting town, playing sport and drinking. Drinking is the least popular activity, looking at the gures overall, with only 2% of men and 1% of women doing it in the morning and 3% of men and 1% of women doing it in the afternoon.

In conclusion, the morning activities such as housework, shopping, job hunting a nd gardening were the most popular, although housework gures for women and gardening gures for men were much greater. In the afternoon, gures were more spread around the activities. The gures in the top half of the table have higher gures though than the lower half.

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Task 2

Animal experimentation is a very difcult issue, with lots of people feeling very strongly about it

Society uses animals for experimentation in different ways. One of most contentious issues is testing cosmetics on animals. The images of animals with substances put in their eyes so that it will improve people’s looks makes many people very angry. Is it necessary? Companies such as the Body Shop say that they do not experiment on animals and they still produce good cosmetics that make money. It cannot be right that making the cosmetics that make our faces look nicer means animals must suffer in terrible ways.

More justiable maybe is that animals are used for testing new drugs. Without these new drugs, people would suffer and sometimes die. Some people believe that animals should not suffer and die to avoid human death and suffering. This, however, is a very different issue to cosmetic testing. It must be correct that most people who oppose drug testing on an imals would change their minds if it were they who were dying or one of their children.

It is certainly sad that animals have to suffer for the health of the human race, but this suffering is justied. Are there any alternatives to animal experimentation. Monkeys are the nearest animals to humans biologically and, without testing on them, one cannot be sure of the effects of new drugs. There are tests on humans also, but these are only conducted when it is known the drugs will not be a health risk to humans. Testing on humans without rst

testing on animals could lead to unnecessary human deaths.

So, in conclusion, animal testing is not justied for non essential issues, but for essential issues such as drug testing, there is no choice and it must be justied.

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Task 1

This report describes two charts: a line graph and a pie chart. The line graph shows the relationship between age and crime in the year 2002 and the pie chart shows the types of crime in the UK for the same year.

The line graph shows that most crime is committed early in the lives of most criminals. From birth to age 8 the crime rate is 0%. At 12 years old, crime is starting to be committed with 2% of 12 year olds taking part in crimes. There is then a huge jump at age 16 up to a rate of 70%. This is even higher at age 20 with a rate of 80%. After age 20 there is a sharp fall going down to 60% at age 24 and then an even sharper fall to 20% at age 28. From age 28 to 44, there is a slow decline in crime rate to 10%. From age 44 to 60 this decline slows further nishing at 8%.

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The pie chart splits crime into four types. The biggest is violent crime at 46%, followed by property crime at 23%. Drug crime is just below at 22% and the smallest is public order crime at 9%.

In conclusion, it is no surprise that teenagers and those in their twenties commit the most crime. There is no clear correlation between the two graphics, however, the ages of the individuals committing the crimes in the pie chart can be estimated using the information given in the line graph.

(230 words)

Task 2

The internet is still a relatively new technology. Not that long ago, there was no internet and few computers. Today, of course, nearly everybody in developed countries has a computer and most people have access to the internet.

People can now nd most things that they need to know about on the internet. This includes the information that people can nd in newspapers, such as the news, sport, business

information, the weather and a range of other things. The newspapers themselves have their own websites where you can access the pages that you can buy in the traditional paper form. Will this mean the end of the newspaper? This will probably not be the case. Although access to the newspapers and information is easy and cheap, this is not just what people want. People like reading a newspaper. They do not necessarily want to sit at a computer screen in their free time, especially if computers are part of their jobs.

In the future, things might be different. The revolution in micro technology and mobile devices now means that access to online information is even easier. Newspapers can be accessed on tablets and even smart phones. People today still love sitting down with a newspaper at breakfast or at a cafe, but, once the youth of today, with their reliance on technology and mobile devices, grow up, the days of the paper newspaper may be numbered. So, in conclusion, some people will replace their need for a newspaper with a computer or mobile device, but for the time being the world will need newspapers on paper. Newspapers will not become a thing of the past, just yet, but, in another few decades, this might not be the case.

(288 words)

Task 1

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The line graph records the amount of money (in pounds sterling) spent on books on the internet in the UK from 1997 to 2002. In 1997, £11 million were spent. This rises by £5 million by 1998. The increase in money spent then rises less rapidly through 1999 (£19 million), 2000 (£22 million) and 2001 (£23 million) until 2002 when £24 million were spent. This gives a total increase from 1997 to 2002 of £13 million.

The second chart is a pie chart that shows the relative percentages of books bought on the internet in the UK individual countries. England is where by far the most books are bought with 81% of the market. Wales comes next with 10% closely followed by Scotland with 8%. Northern Ireland lies last with only 1% of the market.

In conclusion, the main relationship that is shown between the two charts is that the rise in internet sales in the UK countries for the dates shown is mostly down to sales within England. This can probably be explained by the larger population of England when compared to the rest of the UK.

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Task 2

Over the last 150 years, medicine has made enormous advances and scientists have discovered the cures for many previously incurable diseases. Now you no longer hear of people dying of cholera, tuberculosis or any of the other killer diseases that used to be so common.

One reason that so few people in the west die from these diseases nowadays is because

medicine is not expensive and easily available. Today we have other diseases to ght against, for example AIDS and cancer. The drugs that are used to treat today’s killer diseases and slow their effects can be found in the west, but in poorer countries people cannot pay for them so people die for no other reason than their poverty. It is clear that drug companies should be obliged to make their products available cheaply in poor countries or allow cheaper generic copies of the drugs to be manufactured under licence. They will still make reasonable prots.

If the big drug companies do not allow their drugs to be available cheaply, companies based in the poorer countries will produce the copies anyway. In India for instance many drugs are copied and sold illegally. Even people from the rich, western countries go there to buy the drugs they want at a cheaper price. Some drug companies have already promised that they will give their drugs at a cheaper price. For example, a company promised AIDS retardant drugs to South Africa. In spite of the promises there has been little action and no drugs go for the thousands suffering from AIDS there.

Drug companies make the good point that the prices that they charge for their drugs lead to more money and research taking place into current killer diseases. In spite of this, most people must agree that drug company prots are sufcient from their western sales to fund research and aid to poorer countries.

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present it is a case of ignoring people who are dying in order to safeguard prots. This is immoral and indefensible no matter what companies say about their business interests.

(358 words)

Task 1

This report will show the symbiotic relationship that exists between the processes that occur when plants and human beings create oxygen and carbon dioxide.

Plants make oxygen through photosynthesis. To do this plants need certain things. Firstly they take in water through their roots from the earth below. Secondly they take in carbon dioxide from the air around them. Thirdly they absorb sunlight from the sun above. With these three things plants are able to produce oxygen through photosynthesis.

Humans and animals perform an opposite process. Humans and animals take oxygen into their lungs through breathing. When humans and animals exhale they breathe out carbon dioxide. In conclusion, it can be seen that plants, humans and animals provide services for each other. Humans and animals need the oxygen that plants produce in order to stay alive. When humans and animals breathe out, they provide the carbon dioxide that plants need in order to survive. If a catastrophe happened to one, then catastrophe must inevitably follow for the other.

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Task 2

It is true that vast amounts are spent on space exploration for apparently little gain,

while people suffer from terrible poverty around the world. This has long been an area for discussion and disagreement.

Supporters of space programs say that space exploration has brought inventions to the world that we would not have had without it. The famous example is non-stick pans! Supporters also point out that it is human nature to strive to discover the unknown and that we can progress in all sorts of ways by unlocking the secrets of the stars. Supporters of space exploration would therefore claim that to curtail our appetite for exploration would be a denial of what makes up a human.

On the other hand, how can human beings justify the billions of dollars spent sending people into space, so they can have non-stick pans, while millions of people around the world are dying of disease and famine? With the money spent on space exploration, wells could be dug, farmland could be developed, medicine could be bought, schools and colleges could be built, and teachers, doctors and nurses could be trained. Even if the human race could justify

spending money on space exploration, would it not be better to spend the money on exploring the sea on Earth, which could offer enough food to provide for the entire world?

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It seems that this essay agrees that money should be spent on other things than space

exploration. However, this is not the case. The reasons for diverting money away from space exploration are clear, but it is vital that the human race should continually strive to develop its technology and broaden its horizons. In the long run, the money is well spent on space exploration.