Fairfax High School - English 10 – Strand 10.7 – Revision
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Final Revision Worksheet
Romeo and Juliet
Essay “Who’s to Blame”
Author of Essay:
Reviewer:
Introductory paragraph
1. What opening strategy does the author use? (Descriptive, quote, statistics, anecdote, made up story, modern example, or comparison with contemporary work)
Put a star next to the most effective or attention grabbing statement.
2. Under line the thesis statement.
Which three characters are being blamed? a.
b. c.
Why are they being blamed? (What about their character and/or motivation) a.
b.
c.
3. Does the opening paragraph include the author and title of the play? (Does the thesis statement begin with the introductory clause “In William Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet,”)
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Body paragraph 1
(Subthesis 1)
1. How does the author transition from the previous paragraph into this paragraph?
2. Under line the subthesis statement. Who is being blamed?
Why are they being blamed? (What about their character and/or motivation)
Is this the same character named first in the thesis statement in the introductory paragraph?
3. Put a star next to places in the paragraph where the author focuses on motivation.
4. Put an “X” next to places in the paragraph where the author focuses on plot.
5. Are there two quotes in the paragraph? Do they support the subthesis statement? Are they cited properly?
6. Are the quotes blended in, or just dropped in abruptly? (Or, if one is blended and the other dropped in, note that as well)
7. Does the author explain the quote? Underline the explanation.
8. What is one confusing/weak part of the paragraph? Circle any parts of the paragraph that do not directly relate to or support the subthesis statement.
9. What is one really good/strong/interesting part of the paragraph? What does the writer do well?
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(Subthesis 2)
1. How does the author transition from the previous paragraph into this paragraph?
2. Under line the subthesis statement. Who is being blamed?
Why are they being blamed? (What about their character and/or motivation)
Is this the same character named first in the thesis statement in the introductory paragraph?
3. Put a star next to places in the paragraph where the author focuses on motivation.
4. Put an “X” next to places in the paragraph where the author focuses on plot.
5. Are there two quotes in the paragraph? Do they support the subthesis statement? Are they cited properly?
6. Are the quotes blended in, or just dropped in abruptly? (Or, if one is blended and the other dropped in, note that as well)
7. Does the author explain the quote? Underline the explanation.
8. What is one confusing/weak part of the paragraph? Circle any parts of the paragraph that do not directly relate to or support the subthesis statement.
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Body paragraph 3
(Subthesis 3)
1. How does the author transition from the previous paragraph into this paragraph?
2. Under line the subthesis statement. Who is being blamed?
Why are they being blamed? (What about their character and/or motivation)
Is this the same character named first in the thesis statement in the introductory paragraph?
3. Put a star next to places in the paragraph where the author focuses on motivation.
4. Put an “X” next to places in the paragraph where the author focuses on plot.
5. Are there two quotes in the paragraph? Do they support the subthesis statement? Are they cited properly?
6. Are the quotes blended in, or just dropped in abruptly? (Or, if one is blended and the other dropped in, note that as well)
7. Does the author explain the quote? Underline the explanation.
8. What is one confusing/weak part of the paragraph? Circle any parts of the paragraph that do not directly relate to or support the subthesis statement.
Fairfax High School - English 10 – Strand 10.7 – Revision
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Conclusion
1. How does the conclusion summarize the main points of the essay – including the characters and why they are being blamed?
2. Note how the conclusion extends the ideas in the essay out to life in general, or connects to a larger abstract idea:
3. Does the concluding paragraph draw all of the pieces of the essay together and give the reader a feeling of closure?
General Thoughts:
1. What is your favorite part of this essay?
2. Circle any grammar or spelling errors – especially those words that spell check will not catch (“two” instead of “to”, “Load” instead of “Lord”…)
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Checklist before Printing:
Go through all of these steps for printing and turning in your essay
Did I save?
Do I have a title to my essay other than Romeo and Juliet?
Is my name in the top right of the first page?
Is my period number under my name in the top right of the first page?
Is the date under my period number in the top right of the first page?
Did I run spell check?
Do I have paragraph breaks?
Is the first line of each paragraph indented?
Are all of my paragraphs in the correct order?
(If I made any changes, did I save again?)
Print, Staple, Turn in:
o Final Draft
o Rough Draft(s)
o Revision worksheet(s)
o You turn in the one your partner wrote on your essay
o Outline Packet
